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[font=Times New Roman][size=3][size=12pt]Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.[/size][/size][/font]
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In the present day world, the word of "success" has magic fascination on individuals. Some young people apply themselves assiduously to studying in order to be successful in future, others do their utmost
to look for the shortcut to become an eminent figure in the world, one of my friends go so far as to
spend his salary for a month attending the training of "how to be successful ".However, when discussing the interesting issue that which factor contributes more the to the success, knowledge from study or the ability of being creative, people with different ideologies will hold different views. From a personal perspective , I would say that the creativity plays a more important role in becoming prominent in future. I will try to demonstrate my points with reasons as follows:[/size][/font]
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For one thing, the fundamental reason that could be seen by the majority is creative person could bring about changes to the world, which would allow himself to be influential and notable. In the long-lasting history of human being, it is the creativity that pull the whole society forward with inventions
and give a name for every inventor. For instance, Edison is regarded as a great man because he invented
a variety of inventions which bring much convenience and color to the ordinary life. What is more ,if you compile a list of
successful people in history, you will find all of them own the tremendous ability of being creative which lead them to be
a noble giant in record. [/font][/size]
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Besides, somebody may obstinately insist that creativity only takes effect if you want to make great contribution to change the world .However, this statement is only part of the picture because if you want to be successful in your own occupation, you also should be innovative. This capability will largely distinguish you from other common people. Whenever there is a ticklish problem, you could always come up with a new solution that lead to higher efficiency .Whenever there are some important conferences ,you could always make distinctive decision which proves to be a effective shortcut .Based on the great contribution you make with your creativity and genius[/font][font=宋体]，[/font][font=Times New Roman]you are more likely to get various opportunity and promotion, which would obviously offer you a brilliant future.[/font][/size]
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In a nutshell, taking into account of all the factors mentioned above, I would lay more stress on the point that creativity contribute more greatly to becoming a successful figure in future.[/font][/size] [quote]Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the [color=red]present day world[/color], the word of "success" has magic fascination on individuals. [u]Some young people apply themselves assiduously to studying in order to be successful in future, others do their utmost
to look for the shortcut to become an eminent figure in the world, one of my friends[color=magenta] go （goes）[/color]so far as to
spend his salary for a month [color=royalblue]attending the training of "how to be successful ".([/color]这段文字有3句话)[/u]However, [u]when discussing the interesting issue that which factor contributes more [color=red]the to[/color] the success,（没有主语）[/u] knowledge from study or the ability of being creative, people with different [color=red]ideologies[/color] will hold different views. From a personal perspective , I would say that the creativity plays a more important role in becoming prominent in future. I will try to demonstrate my points with reasons as follows:[color=royalblue]attending....后面这部分位置不对，放在month后面，感觉是在修饰month 注意审题，题目强调的是[/color][color=red]why,你说这句“[color=#000000]the creativity plays a more important role in becoming prominent in future[/color]”，和题目不对口
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For one thing, [color=red]the （a）[/color] fundamental reason that could be seen by the majority is creative person could [color=red]bring about[/color] changes to the world, which would allow himself to be influential and notable. In the long-lasting history of human being, it is the creativity that pull the whole society forward with inventions
and give a name for every inventor. For instance, Edison is regarded as a great man because he invented
a variety of inventions which bring much convenience and color to the ordinary life. What is more ,if you compile a list of
successful people in history, you will find all of them own the tremendous ability of being creative which lead them to be
a noble giant in record.
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.......................::z8 请先审题，你的introduction 和 第一个reason，我是看不出来和题目有什么关系。题目：Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? 你应该注意这几个关键字[color=red][u]why,dangerous sports and other activities[/u][/color] 不好意思 题目贴错了 原题是 if one want to be successful ,which is more important,the knowledge from study or the ability of being creative?
非常感谢大侠宝贵的修改意见！ 这个都能贴错？？？考试的时候“不小心”写错了怎么办
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