依照评分标准逐一分析一篇ETSissue6分范文
issue: In our time, specialist of all kinds are highly ove-rated. We need more generalists--people who can provide broad perspectives.e6d e Y1K7V#?!BAte+mtD
1.complexity:提出问题的复杂性5mb]x*v*aD3D
一方面，Specialists are necessary in order to allow society as a whole to properly and usefully assimilate the masses of new 2j0j/?5CL,G@0c c {
information and knowledge.另一方面，over-specialization means narrow foci in which people can losethe larger picture.最后，
Thus, while our form of society necessitates specialists, generlists are equally important..N0Lm2P!R7E} ]K|3_
2.insightful reasons: m5j(u0`y5j+A
讲specialists:1.to allow society as a whole to properly and usefully assimilate the masses of new information and knowledge;
讲generalists:1.over-specialization means narrow foci; 2. Not only may over-specializationbe dangerous in terms of the truth, #O,tF2U5?T&qK![c-[ j0o
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purity and cohesion of knowledge, but it can also serve to drown moral or universal issues; 3. over-specialization means 3k2o'k~ b9]+e"\&|6quy
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personal and psychological compartmentalization. /D8gs/e%Z f L
3.persuasive examples:
讲specialists: 用了the head of Pharmacology at my university的话5g Lp4h*am%k1u
讲generalists: No one can hope to understand the human body by only inspecting one's own toe-nails. Further, if we inspct /n l QS!L
only our toe-nails, we may conclude that the whole body is hard and white.LR0H$C ?)HY4B
4.well-focused:不跑题DT.NDE rTS H
逐段分析：
1段：提出论点call for a balance...(by the by,ETS给出的评语中对此段肯定有加："the introductory paragraph announces the ~'E&w*b|C9~$Em
writer's position on the issue and provides the context within which the writer will developtaht position."可见context和
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position重要性)
2段：先specialist are necessary to... 再As the head once said... 最后This illustrates the point that...
3段：对2段的小结simply put... {8Y-hg&E*_(Y%FD#v
凡好文章的body都有一个侧重点，本文着重论证了generalists的不可或缺
4段：先分论点over-specialization means narrow foci...再有从反面说明what we learn may be irrelevant within the framework of a Hx3S R'T6l&?{
broader perspective. 再正面提出sharing among specialists最后用两个分号隔开的句子把正反两个方面再说一次。.Q*B+@7G7\n
5段：先分论点over-specialization is dangerous in terms of...再正面说generalists的作用,从此句中出现了generalists,开始展开并且gUi ^ WlL
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将二者结合讨论了。接着来了个让步。最后在true advancement中体现generalist的作用(by the by, 窃以为本短的分论点与论证过程结合的
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6段：先分论点over-specialization means compartmentalization(隔离（compartmentalization）倾向，孤立地处理实际上相倚的概念要素$P~ j ?2k6z0j
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，散失了他们相互作用的一面.)接着从pigeonholing too early和the loss of community来说。
7段：总结段。先分诉without generalists... without a society that recognizes the importance of generalities...最后把两者接合到'z"uV u4r d
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5. well-organized:
典型的让步式论证法5V dm}y b/us1Ir)Y c;V
用transitional words衔接得很精当：simply put, on the other hand, not only..but it can also,further, finally, thus.
6. clearly and precisely:
论点明确，几个metaphor都用得很到位
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8. varied sentence structure:
首段：In this era of... both positive and negative effects... call for...
2段: Specialists are necessary in order to... assimilate... that+两个定语从句。 As the... said:"..." This illustrate the V)_,qS0[C
point that主语+is at a stage in which+定语从句+in order for our society to +不定式;W%wN$l zCk{RjV~6]
3段： Simply put, without...our society would. While it was fine...,+对比，1w wJ-U { w.{^i
4段： On the other hand, over-specializaiton means... No one can hope to... What... may be... but may be... Further, if...we Zl[K;mT
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may conclude that...主语+must...Simply throwing out... means; it is only when one can make... that...强调句
5段： Not only may...but it can also serve to... Generalists and only generalists can... With specialization, each person D v UV^Sl
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focuses on... Thus, industrialization... are driven ahead. Meanwhile no individual can...+定语从句
6段： Finally, over-specialization means... People are forced... and must... Not only does this make for... but it ?e#R6i!r;N
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guarantees...
7段： Without generalists, society becomes... Without a society that +定语从句, individual become... Thus,
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while...generalists are equally... Specialists drive us... while generalists make sure...
9.effective vocabulary:
era, increasing life complexity, psychological displacement, call for a balance, properly and usefully assimilate, the masses
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of new information, come out of, widely disseminated though, global mass media, turn for basic knowledge, narrowly focussed
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individuals, add one small rung to the ladder, climb to the moon, illustrate the point, take advantage of, information 2@.E`_z&~ MQ
availale, simply put, bogged down, the Sargasso Sea, overload, laws, digest and assimilate, in any given field, over-BG9X(Y y0On7PD
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specialization, narrow foci, lose the larger picture, inspecting, toe-nails, internally coherent, irrelavant or fallacious
within the framework of a perspective, further, thus, come by, sharing, among, simply throwing out, various, a pile of, make "eZ)F3I@'Gf-v
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with them a mosaic, form a picture, in terms of, purity and cohesion of knowledge, drown moral or universal issues, a broad
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enough picture, focus on, industrialization, expansion, wholistic, stifling, for greater good of all, &HoN n1Uc p
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compartmentalization,pigeonholes, pigeonholing=specializing, consume, be lost in, make for, generally poorly-educated
individuals, guarantees, a sense of community, psychological displacement, personal dissatisfaction, inward-looking,
recognizes the importance, necessitates, drive us forward, in a series of thrust, on the jousting field, know what the stakes rO!A!U8~-a |r!rx
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10.superior facility with the conventions (grammar, usage, and mechanics):UB4`xAc;oQ"Z
几个metaphor,很精彩：bogged down in the Sargasso Sea of information, add one small rung to ladder, climb to the moon,
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understand the human body by only inspecting one's own toe-nails. pigeon-holes, a pile of, in a series of thrust, jousting 'P JsA?l
field 谢谢楼主啊 谢谢楼主,应该是很好的呀.
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