**应该投钱improve internet access or public transportation?

There is a controversial issue about whether government should sponsoring internet access or public transportation. Depending on personal experience, personality type and emotional concern, we may find that some people hold the opinion of improving internet access; but others, in contrast, deem public transportation as a premier choice. As far as I am concerned, the information I have collected over recent years direct me to believe that improving internet access is more important.

To begin with, I concede that public transportation, which serves as an independent factor in city developing, is of great value. After all, without mature subway and enough public buses, people will spend much more time on the way. Suppose the city has a good developed transportation, people can arrange their schedule more freely, and don't need to be afraid of held up by the jams.

However compelling these cases may sound, improving transportation may give rise to a number of questions. Firstly, the noisy pollution and air pollution will be more serious when constructing the subways or applying more public buses. What's more, the labor wasting is also a kind of problem.

On the other hand, improving internet access can address to some people's needs that transportation cannot. For one thing, based on the powerful internet, people from the entire world may have online meeting with each other but not in a meeting room, purchase goods when surfing the internet and have classes in front of the computers but not in the school. We don't need to take buses or subways any more. Apart from that, improving internet access is in a completely different way. What all we need to do is supplying more routers and servers in every corner of the city, hiring more computer engineers to take care of the whole network and sponsoring more money in researching the internet issue to make it more efficient. Comparing with developing transportation, This is more applicable and less environment pollution.

In the final analysis, it is true that both transportation and internet are part parcel of city developing. However, considering the potential problems resulted from improving transportations and the greater benefits of sponsoring the internet developing, I believe it is sensible to choose improving internet access.

Hello:
let' me tell you something.


To begin with, I concede that public transportation, which serves as an independent factor in city developing, is of great value. After all, without mature subway and enough public buses, people will spend much more time on the way. Suppose the city has a good developed transportation, people can arrange their schedule more freely, and don't need to be afraid of held up by the jams.

It's about the public transportation, you told me that it is pretty important to maintain a good transportation.

However compelling these cases may sound, improving transportation may give rise to a number of questions. Firstly, the noisy pollution and air pollution will be more serious when constructing the subways or applying more public buses. What's more, the labor wasting is also a kind of problem.

This paragraph, you told me that there are also disadvantages of transporatation.


SO, seems you paid too much attention to the "transportation" that you didn't want.
that means you miss the main theme of the essay,  so, gaventracy, I have to say, you failed in this job.

这个回复。。。怎么看着那么奇怪啊？我是新人大家别见笑
那我接着不是说了internet access的好处了么，为什么这样不可以呢？
可以解答下么？

yes, you stress the advantages of the internet system.
but you used only one paragraph.
What you need to emphasize is the "internet system"
isn't it?

那你可以给我点建议么？我觉得用这样的模式能写的多点
就是先写不好的一面的好处，然后说它的缺点在哪里，最后说我选的那一点的好处
你觉得我应该怎么展开比较好呢？把前面尽量写少，然后把我选的那一点尽量写多？
或者你可以给写建议么？
谢谢

if  you support one, write more about it.

就是说我选的那个点写的还不够多是吧？
那有什么别的意见么？在其他方面？

对，你要支持的观点你说的不够多。其他的还好，注意变换句式：）

谢谢提醒，在变换句式上有什么好的建议么？我觉得这个很难做的，因为没时间多想，只好想到什么写什么，不然时间肯定超的
怎么办呢？

很好

楼上的谢谢回复，但是能不能多说点什么呢？