【TEAM 18】 第『五』次活动 2008年6月23日 星期一布置

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题目 【185】No。128

Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer


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[ 本帖最后由 asmodeusjj 于 2008-6-23 13:02 编辑 ]

asmodeusjj 修改天涯履痕 第四周 第一次作业

Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer。

Is physical exercise important for students? Needless to say, the answer is “yes”. Considering the reason that physical exercise can draw students out of tiered study (draw out 不知道能不能这么用), promote their physical and spiritual（mental好点，心理健康） health and aim them to make some friends with common hobbies（to get along with different people）,(, thus,)I suggest (that) students (加should，suggest应该用虚拟语气) take physical exercises as possible as they can.

To begin with, doing sports exercises is an efficient approach to make students relax and relieve pressure from study（额，硬是挑刺的话，这里有点重复了，建议：relax and stronger）. In contemporary（limited） times, students attend long-time（long-term是长期的意思吧） classes and get a（删掉a） large amount of homework, being confronted with drastic competition in study. How to reduce their burden? It is physical exercises that are helpful for relaxation and healthy entertainment. During extracurricular activities, these joyful boys and girls are released from mountains of books and torturing tests and they forget their annoyance temporarily. After appropriate sports activities, it seems that depression and frustration are gone with the flowing perspiration. When devoting to study again, students are in a high spirit（中式英语，建议：students with high spirit ） and study efficiency is sure（用副词surely） to be improved. Therefore, sports activities are equal with（to） a kind of flavoring for
boring study.

In addition, students who often take part in physical exercises are healthier in physics and spirit （语法不对，建议：healthier and more energetic）than those who are buried in mountains of books.（不知道这么说对不对，试试： are buried by many books） For one thing, physical exercises are definitely beneficial for one’s physical health. It is reported that people who take sports activities frequently live longer and stay（keep） younger than those who seldom attend physical exercises. Sports can build up one’s body resistance（表达不适当，建议：enhance one’s immune system） to viruses and keep you away from disease（加S，用复数）. For another thing, students who take extracurricular activities at regular time are（加上一个：more likely to be） heart-opening and skillful in teamwork and cooperation, which is extremely significant for character development of students（表达不对，建议：for their mental development）. Since a lot of sports activities（改为games好点，体现team-work） such as basketball and football require group working, those activities（games） can teach students how to cooperate with others, which is favorable for job hunting in the future（which brings benefits to their future career）

Finally, students can make some friends during taking part in sports activities（games）. Friends with same hobbies join（play，或者gather） together, and they share their opinions and experience（加S，用复数）, which is instrumental for their growing up（growth）. Friends share our joy and distress（happiness and frustration） and they are our most valuable treasure. Therefore, attending physical exercises can bring about some happy accidents（events）, close friends, who give you life beneficiary（这么表达不太对劲）.


In brief, physical exercises can bring students with life beneficiary. However, there is one point which should not be ignored, that is, it is not advisable for students （to） except those in physical education（PE lessons：体育课） school to take excessive（用副词修饰形容词） physical exercises, which may make one feel tiered and influence academic studies. Therefore, appropriate sports activities are suggested at regular time for school students.

总结：看了你的几篇文章，感觉有些表达方式不太准确，语法需要加强，句子减少拖沓现象。

先抑后扬：文章分析比较深入，举例全面。
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题目 【185】No。128

Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer


Outline: Physical exercise should be a required part
1= improve healthy condition, all-round development
2=Relax
3=Team work

Nowadays, students face fierce competition in study, they seem to fail to take into account the fact that physical exercise does not so useful for their future career. However, I strongly believe that physical exercise is extremely important for students. There are several reasons to name:

First of all, physical exercise contributes directly to their condition so that better prepare them for any physical challenge in the future. Although, students can handle school life easily, once they start their career rapid assignments which require much more physical energy will come. In addition, you will so busy that can not go out for exercise. As a result, you will be more likely to be beaten in your career. Therefore, proper physical exercise is needed in school life.

Moreover, because their brain has exhausted after tense study, because the studying efficiency has lowed down, they need to relax. Experts claim that physical exercise is a good way for students to release pressure. The part of brain which is used to study gets a welcome break while another that deals with physical work gains training, this process also brings benefit to all-round development of students. So physical exercise, study promotes their development mutually.

Last, most sports games in physical exercise such as basketball, football, require students play in groups. Those games could develop their sense of team work. While in a game, they have to cooperate with different teammate to win the competition. The cooperation, which includes exchanging ideas with teammates, assisting a shoot, stopping a brawl in a group, teaches them how to get along with others and how to gain a goal with your team. In the future, they have to performance in a team to accomplish tough assignments and compete with other team. No one is hero but their team.

From what has been discussed above, we can safely draw our conclusion that physical exercise is important for student both in their healthy condition and future career. (327/ 40min)

[ 本帖最后由 asmodeusjj 于 2008-6-24 12:27 编辑 ]

Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
In my opinion, health is the most important thing of all in the world, especially for children. So I think physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. The reasons go as follows:
Firstly, childhood is kind of stage which is lack of self-control and knowledge. They are curious about everything and they are childish, they have no idea what is good for them and what they need very well which leads to the need of supervision of parents and teachers, which means something beneficial to them must be required. Physical exercises are really great for them, they need not only have a great brain but also a healthy body ready for army or jobs and studying is a hard job, it can’t be finished without a well body.
Secondly, as we all know, school is a place having principles and at the same time is most related to children’s life. Children care lots about what teachers say to them and the activities in school. So I think as a required part of every school day will be the most effective way to help children to do physical exercise. And in school we have professional PE teachers teach them how to do right exercises and choose kinds of suitable exercise for every student. Furthermore, we may find some students have gifts for sports and we can open a door for their life to Olympics.
Finally, taking physical exercises are parts of time children can be together, they can learn how to communicate, how to make friends with each other and a time they can talk freely without interrupting others studying. Take myself for example, when I was in primary school, junior school and senior school, I did eye exercises and body exercises everyday with my classmates and the best part of physical exercise is it can save us from boring study exercises, we need have a break and stretch ourselves and protect our eyes. We talked with each other about how things going recently and made some jokes and so on. I can remember these funny times till now.
In conclusion, I totally agree with the statement physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. It will have lots of fun for students.

Because I got the experience of university life, I think that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day for the following reasons.
First a healthy body is the prerequisite of a good academic study. Some old people always tell me that health is the first digit of a number and other factors such as career, money, academic success and etc are all zeroes following this digit. If you have health and then money, career, successful academic study, you can have 1000. But if you do not have the first digit one, money, career and successful academic study can only make zero. Only by the PE class can a student get good health.
And also, during physical exercise students can communicate with each other very freely and talk something beyond the content of academic study. As I know, one of my best friends got to know her husband when they participated in a badminton class during their graduate school study. They both took part in badminton class and practiced playing badminton together. Her husband played better than she and was her coach at that time. They got the chance to know each other thoroughly during the course of exercise. Actually speaking, her husband is one of the best men I know till now. He is so considerate that he almost does all of the housework. He even remembers to call my friend awake when she has a nap in the noon. I think that my friend is so lucky because she finds her Mr. Right. If there is no physical exercise, she will not get this chance.
Finally, those who like physical exercise intend to be optimistic and have good characters. We can see pieces of news in the newspaper that nowadays a lot of college students get the disease of depression because of the pressure from academic study, job- finding and etc. To some extent, physical exercise can help a person build good character such as optimism. Mere concentration on academic study will lead to the disease of depression. Having physical exercise can let one relaxed and forget academic study for a while. Also physical exercise can teach a person the definition of perseverance. In any game, the most valuable spirit is not giving up until the last moment. If you watch the Euro 2008, you will find that the German team has this kind of spirit. I think that this spirit can be applied to every field universally. Every work needs the spirit of perseverance. So after the students graduate, this spirit learned from PE class will benefit their future life as well.
All in all, I think physical exercise should be a required part of every school day.

Because I got the experience of university life,（可否改为？according to my own experience of campus life） I think that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day for the following reasons.
First a healthy body is the prerequisite （赞）of a good academic study. Some old people always tell me that health is the first digit of a number and other factors such as career, money, academic success and etc are all zeroes following this digit. If you have health and then money, career, successful academic study（可否加上will follow you）, you can have 1000？意义不明确1000块人民币？. But if you do not have the first digit one, money, career and successful academic study can only make zero. 这一段这几句好像有点罗索重复？你自己觉得呢？就着一个意思写了四句话！！嗬嗬！！Only by the PE class can a student get good health.这句话是不是太绝对了？？可否改为：can guarantee a good health.?
And also, during physical exercise students can communicate with each other very freely and talk something beyond the content of academic study.赞一下嗨嗨因为我也写了这个内容：） As （可否添加 far as?凑字数！嘿嘿）I know, one of my best friends got to know her husband when they participated in a badminton class during their graduate school study. They both took part in badminton class and practiced playing badminton together. Her husband played better than she (可否改为her?)
and was her coach at that time. 这几句好像有点中文化哦你是不是想说那个可爱的男生打得比你同学好后来就教你同学然后就对眼上啦？They got the chance to know each other thoroughly during the course of exercise. Actually speaking, her husband is one of the best men 马屁之嫌呵呵I know till now. He is so considerate that he almost does all of the housework. He even remembers to call my friend awake when she has a nap in the noon. I think that my friend is so lucky because she finds her Mr. Right. 唠叨太多了吧？？说多了有点？马屁之嫌嘿嘿If there is no physical exercise, she will not get this chance.
Finally, those who like physical exercise intend to be optimistic and have good characters这个不一定吧？？ 拳王阿里克不是什么好脾气，中国篮球星李毅好像也不是好惹的吧？.嘿嘿 We can see pieces of news in the newspaper that nowadays a lot of college students get the disease of depression because of the pressure from academic study, job- finding and etc. To some extent, physical exercise can help a person build good character such as optimism. Mere concentration on academic study will lead to the disease of depression. Having physical exercise can let one relaxed and forget academic study for a while. Also physical exercise can teach a person the definition of perseverance. In any game, the most valuable spirit is not giving up until the last moment这个不错 赞！
. If you watch the Euro 2008, you will find that the German team has this kind of spirit. I think that this spirit can be applied to every field universally. Every work needs the spirit of perseverance. So after the students graduate, this spirit learned from PE class will benefit their future life as well.
All in all, I think physical exercise should be a required part of every school day.
这篇文章总体还不错哦，字数是不是多了一点？？前面有点啰嗦，但是后面挺好的！！！是不是越写越有感觉？？？赞一个！！加油哦！！

天涯履痕 第四周 第一次作业

Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer。

Is physical exercise important for students? Needless to say, the answer is “yes”. Considering the reason that physical exercise can draw students out of tiered study, promote their physical and spiritual health and aim them to make some friends with common hobbies, I suggest students take physical exercises as possible as they can.

To begin with, doing sports exercises is an efficient approach to make students relax and relieve pressure from study. In contemporary times, students attend long-time classes and get a large amount of homework, being confronted with drastic competition in study. How to reduce their burden? It is physical exercises that are helpful for relaxation and healthy entertainment. During extracurricular activities, these joyful boys and girls are released from mountains of books and torturing tests and they forget their annoyance temporarily. After appropriate sports activities, it seems that depression and frustration are gone with the flowing perspiration. When devoting to study again, students are in a high spirit and study efficiency is sure to be improved. Therefore, sports activities are equal with a kind of flavoring for boring study.

In addition, students who often take part in physical exercises are healthier in physics and spirit than those who are buried in mountains of books. For one thing, physical exercises are definitely beneficial for one’s physical health. It is reported that people who take sports activities frequently live longer and stay younger than those who seldom attend physical exercises. Sports can build up one’s body resistance to viruses and keep you away from disease. For another thing, students who take extracurricular activities at regular time are heart-opening and skillful in teamwork and cooperation, which is extremely significant for character development of students. Since a lot of sports activities such as basketball and football require group working, those activities can teach students how to cooperate with others, which is favorable for job hunting in the future.

Finally, students can make some friends during taking part in sports activities. Friends with same hobbies join together, and they share their opinions and experience, which is instrumental for their growing up. Friends share our joy and distress and they are our most valuable treasure. Therefore, attending physical exercises can bring about some happy accidents, close friends, who give you life beneficiary.


In brief, physical exercises can bring students with life beneficiary. However, there is one point which should not be ignored, that is, it is not advisable for students except those in physical education school to take excessive physical exercises, which may make one feel tiered and influence academic studies. Therefore, appropriate sports activities are suggested at regular time for school students.

谢谢小史的热情点评。第一个论点偶想表达的意思是健康是1，财富、事业等全部是后面的0。有了这个1，才能往后面一个个的加零。否则就全部是零了，谬意义。不会表达阿。但是搜肠刮肚了，就这么一个很中国的论点。

bonbonhu修改asmodeusjj   第四周第一次作业
Outline: Physical exercise should be a required part
1= improve healthy condition, all-round development
2=Relax
3=Team work

Nowadays, students face fierce competition in study, they seem to fail to take into account the fact that physical exercise does not so useful for their future career. （Run-on sentence, 可以增加一个连词如since等。句意是学生不大重视体育对吧，不是很容易理解）However, I strongly believe that physical exercise is extremely important for students. There are several reasons to name:

First of all, physical exercise contributes directly to their condition so that better prepare （缺失主语）them for any physical challenge in the future. Although, students can handle school life easily, once they start their career rapid assignments which require much more physical energy will come. In addition, you will be so busy that can not go out for exercise. As a result, you will be more likely to be beaten in your career. Therefore, proper physical exercise is needed in school life.

Moreover, because their brain has exhausted after tense study, because the studying efficiency has lowed down (been lowered语法错误，low是adj. 且本身就有降低的意思，不需要再用down,redundant), they need to relax. Experts claim that physical exercise is a good way for students to release pressure. The part of brain which is used to study gets a welcome break while another that deals with physical work gains training (句意比较vague), this process also brings benefit to all-round development of students. So physical exercise, study promotes their development mutually. （主语是虾米？主谓一致agreement的问题）

Last, most sports games in physical exercise such as basketball, football, require students to play in groups. Those games could develop their sense of team work. While in a game, they have to cooperate with different teammate to win the competition. The cooperation, which includes exchanging ideas with teammates, assisting a shoot, stopping a brawl in a group, teaches them how to get along with others and how to gain a goal with your team. In the future, they have to performance perform in a team to accomplish tough assignments and compete with other team. No one is hero but their team.

From what has been discussed above, we can safely draw our conclusion that physical exercise is important for student both in their healthy condition and future career. (327/ 40min)
论点很好，就是其中有些语法问题需要注意。
偶在word中是用彩色编辑的，Y每次显示出来的都还是黑色？

sheepsally第四周第一次作业

题目 【185】No。128

Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer


outline: students should be a required part of every school day
          1.health
          2.increase the efficiency of academic study

Students in pesent-day society are characterized by increasing consentration on their academic study. The poblem that whether students should totally focus on academic study or be required to do exercises, becomes a hot point in schools. As far as I am concerned, my choice definitely goes to the latter one. Three main factors lead to my option.

First and foremost, doing exercises everyday is regarded as an essential factor to students’ health, which serves as the foundation of everything in their lives, including academic study. If you had cancer o even were very close to death, how could it possible for you to concentrate on academic study? On the other hand, I propose the opinion that the goal in our lives is undoubtedly not academic study. Instead, some students aim for achievements, while others for satisfying jobs. Academic study is considered as no more than the process of seeking what they want. However, without health, which is greatly affected by exercises, hardly are they likely to reach the goal of their lives.

Secondly, doing exercises plays a positive role in increasing the efficiency of academic study. Students are not machines but human beings. Thus, hardly are they capable of totally concentrating on academic study for so long a time. They probably just fix their eyes on the books without thinking about anything. What a waste of time! Consequently, I hold the opinion that they need some exercises to get relaxed. During exercises, such as swimming, playing basketball, students tend to have a great mass of fun with their friends. As a result, students’ mind become clear, and they can learn better and more quickly.

All in all, due to the health and higher efficiency students can get from doing exercises, there is no doubt that students should be required to do exercises in every school day.

sheepsally修改scofield131第四周第一次作业

Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

In my opinion, health is the most important thing of all in the world, especially for children.(这样开头很突兀，应该先提论点） So I think physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. The reasons go as follows:

Firstly, childhood is a kind of stage which is lack of self-control and knowledge. They（你前面并没提到children，所以不能这样指代，直接说children．呵呵不过students不一定那么小吧) are curious about everything and they are childish, they have no idea what is good for them and what they need very well which leads to the need of supervision of parents and teachers, which means something beneficial to them must be required. Physical exercises are really great for them,(这一堆和论点有啥关系？？？） they need not only have a great brain but also a healthy body (加上which are) ready for army or jobs and studying is a hard job, it can’t be finished without a well body.

Secondly, as we all know, school is a place having principles and at the same time is most related to children’s life(lives). Children care lots about what teachers say to them and the activities in school. So I think as(to regard exercises as) a required part of every school day will be the most effective way to help children to do physical exercise. And in school we have professional PE teachers teach them how to do right exercises and choose kinds of suitable exercise for every student. Furthermore, we may find some students have gifts for sports and we can open a door for their life to Olympics.

Finally, taking physical exercises are parts of time( during physical exercises,) children can be together　．they （Thus, they）can learn how to communicate, how to make friends with each other and a time (去掉）they can talk freely without interrupting others studying.（study) Take myself for example( as an example), when I was in primary school, junior school and senior school, I did eye exercises and body exercises everyday with my classmates and the best part of physical exercise is it can save us from boring study exercises, we need have a break and stretch ourselves and protect our eyes. We talked with each other about how things going recently and made some jokes and so on. I can remember these funny times till now.

In conclusion, I totally agree with the statement physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. It will have lots of fun for students.（make a lot of fun for..)


总结：１.语言满流畅，不过用次略显平淡，注意积累哦；还有句式变化也不多，这方面可以多考虑一下，例如从句倒装还有强调
　　　２.建议在段落开头明确地提出原因，你一二点做的不够好
　　　３.一起加油哦
　　　

[ 本帖最后由 SHEEPSALLY 于 2008-6-24 23:21 编辑 ]

Do you agree or disagree with the statement television is bad for children.
Outline: disagree with the statement

Television is just a method

Parents should control the children’s usage of televisions

How to benefit from televisions
Television is a revolutionary communication technology as well as newspaper, computer and so on. Although it brings about some disadvantages, the advantages weigh more than that. So I disagree with the statement television is bad for children, several reasons are as follows:
Television is a wonderful product of the more and more developing technology, which is a vivid communication way with images and sounds, attracts lots of people no matter youth and old. The family being together watching TV at home is a warm thing especially in rainy, snowy, or cold winter days. Television brings us varieties of news, programs, shows, and dramas. We can have great television programs such as the Apprentice, we can stay at home and enjoy the latest fashion show in Paris, and we can hear all the important news around the world. Funny things are countless because of television are coming to our life.
There are some people accuse television as a poison for children because children spend much more time on television rather than studying. Of course we have to admit there are some bad shows also in television but this is still so unfair, television is just an object, tool, and it can’t force anyone to be addicted to it. The choice is on the people’s hand. We choose to watch what and when then we should take the responsibility to accuse ourselves for our own choices.
As we all know, children need principles and the supervision of parents. From my opinion, limiting the time children spend on watching television everyday will be an effective way to protect children from abusing watching television. Parents should also limit the channels their children can watch, to make sure they are away from violence, porn and other bad shows.
Furthermore, another important thing parents should do is to take television out of children’s room. According to survey, lots of children spend a whole day in their room at holiday when the television is in there. They spend more than four hours watching television in room in regular school days. So put it in the right place and set a limit on the channels and

time will be the best choice for children to benefit from excellent educational shows in television.
All in all, finding a right way for children to use the television, children will have fun and learn varieties of knowledge from it, by the way, it is just a tool for us.

天涯履痕修改sheepsally第四周第一次作业
题目
【185】No。128

Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer
outline: students should be a required part of every school day
          1.health
          2.increase the efficiency of academic study
Students in present-day society are characterized by increasing concentration on their academic study. The problem that(删除that, 因为whether就可以作为这个从句的连接词) whether students should totally focus on academic study or be required to do exercises becomes a hot point in schools. As far as I am concerned, my choice definitely goes to the latter one. Three main factors lead to my option.
First and foremost, doing exercises everyday is regarded as an essential factor to（建议改为for） students’ health, which serves as the foundation of everything in their lives, including academic study. If you had cancer or even were very close to death, how could it be possible for you to concentrate on academic study? (在托福写作中，一般不用you,建议改为a student) On the other hand, I propose the opinion that the goal in(建议改为of) our lives is undoubtedly not academic study. Instead, some students aim for achievements, while others for satisfying jobs. Academic study is considered as no more than the process of seeking what they want. However, without health, which is greatly affected by exercises, hardly are they likely to reach the goal of their lives.

Secondly, doing exercises plays a positive role in increasing the efficiency of academic study. Students are not machines but human beings. Thus, hardly are they capable of totally concentrating on academic study for so long a time. They probably just fix their eyes on the books without thinking about anything（一开始读到这句话时，我没有明白是什么意思，所以建议改为but think about other things unrelated with the content of the books）. What a waste of time! Consequently, I hold the opinion that they need some exercises to get relaxed. During exercises, such as swimming, playing basketball, students tend to have a great mass of fun with their friends. As a result, students’ mind become clear, and they can learn better and more quickly.
All in all, due to the health and higher efficiency students can get from doing exercises, there is no doubt that students should be required to do exercises in every school day.

总结：在考场能写出这样的文章已经很不错了，我只是修改了一些小错误。不错，加油！

Do you agree or disagree with the statement television is bad for children.

outline:
1. Watching television will make children reluctant to keep in touch with other people
2. Watching television will do harm to children’s health.
3. A lot of sex and violence is included in television.

Recently there is a debate over whether watching television is bad for children. Some people assert that watching television is bad for children, while other people believe that watching television is good for children. As a matter of fact, the issue of whether watching television is bad for children is a complex and controversial one. Different people hold different views due to their distinct backgrounds. Therefore, there is not a universal answer to this question, and whether one choice takes precedence over the other may quite depend on the specific situation. The decision, nevertheless, is not an easy one to make. As far as I am concerned, however, I agree that watching television is bad for children, and do not agree that watching television is good for children. My view can be greatly substantiated by the following discussions.
The first argument that can be presented to develop my position is that watching television makes children reluctant to keep in contact with other children or people. A good example may be found in the case that after school some TV-addicted children never come out to play with their classmates. There are a lot of healthy extracurricular activities, but TV-addicted children have no interest in these at all. Under this circumstance, it is obvious that it is not good for the children to foster a cooperative and positive character. Since on the one hand, school education teaches children knowledge, on the other hand, school education gives children an environment to play with each other. Children should learn to help each other generously. These kinds of virtues can only be achieved by after-school activities. Watching television has nothing to do with this.
In addition, there is another reason for me to choose this statement. The reason is not far to seek that watching TV will do harm to children's health. To illustrate, let us consider that in the summer vacation couch potatoes sit before television all day and never go out. After the summer vacation, the children will develop the disease of neck. Another equally important aspect is that as we all know, nowadays a lot of young people become short-sighted. A main reason of this common disease is watching television for a long time. How can such bad health ensure a future success for the children?
Last but not least, there are a lot of sex and violence scenes included in television. Some delinquent children admit that they learn all the things from television series. I’d like to cite another example. That’s some cartoons made in Japan. Crayon Shin is a Japan cartoon and there are a lot of pornographic plots in it. These plots will make children become mature too early.
Admittedly, it may be true that watching television do good to children in some conditions such as know the worldwide news and kill their spare time. However, this alone does not constitute a sufficient support to claim that watching television is good for children. When the advantages and disadvantages of x and y are carefully examined, the most striking conclusion is obvious that watching television is bad for children.
后天就要考了，到现在还是模版很罗嗦，论据根本写不出，该怎么办啊？

[ 本帖最后由 bonbonhu 于 2008-6-27 11:09 编辑 ]

bonbonhu修改scofield131 第六次homework
Do you agree or disagree with the statement television is bad for children.
Outline: disagree with the statement

Television is just a method

Parents should control the children’s usage of televisions

How to benefit from televisions
Television is a revolutionary communication technology as well as newspaper, computer and so on. Although it brings about some disadvantages, the advantages weigh more than that （看到一些文章是用outweigh的，改成the advantages outweigh disadvantages如何？）. So I disagree with the statement television is bad for children, several reasons are as follows:
Television is a wonderful product of the more and more developing technology, which is a vivid communication way with images and sounds, attracts lots of people no matter youth and old. The family being together watching TV at home is a warm thing especially in rainy, snowy, or cold winter days. Television brings us varieties of news, programs, shows, and dramas. We can have great television programs such as the Apprentice, we can stay at home and enjoy the latest fashion show in Paris, and we can hear all the important news around the world. Funny things are countless because of television are coming to our life. ( because of后跟名次短语，这里建议改成because)
There are some people accuse television as a poison for children （accuse sb. of sth.吧）because children spend much more time on television rather than studying. Of course we have to admit there are some bad shows also in television but this is still so unfair, television is just an object, tool, and it can’t force anyone to be addicted to it. The choice is on the people’s hand. We choose to watch what and when then we should take the responsibility to accuse ourselves for our own choices.
As we all know, children need principles and the supervision of parents. From my opinion, limiting the time children spend on watching television everyday will be an effective way to protect children from abusing watching television. Parents should also limit the channels their children can watch, to make sure they are away from violence, porn and other bad shows.
Furthermore, another important thing parents should do is to take television out of children’s room. According to survey, lots of children spend a whole day in their room at holiday when the television is in there. （去掉in, there本身是副词） They spend more than four hours watching television in room in regular school days. So put it in the right place and set a limit on the channels and

time will be the best choice for children to benefit from excellent educational shows in television.
All in all, finding a right way for children to use the television, children will have fun and learn varieties of knowledge from it, by the way, it is just a tool for us.
小史的论点不错，论据也很充分，崇拜啊～